Writing a Song w/John Mayer, Part 2

Early in the month of August, I posted about a contest that Esquire magazine is having. If you're too lazy to read the old post, John Mayer offered up some of his unused lyrics and asked singer/songwriters to write a song using his lyrics. The winner of the contest (chosen by John) wins himself/herself a $1400 John Mayer Stratocaster.

Anyway, the point is that I finally wrote the tune and sent it in. It's a pretty bad quality recording, but I kind of like the fact that it's just a guy (me) in his dorm room recording the song on a $5 microphone. No fancy equipment; just myself, my guitar, and John's lyrics. I am not getting my hopes up because I probably won't win, but I think it's a pretty good interpretation of the lyrics.

Here is the mp3 of the [untitled] song. Let me know what you think.

Edit: Here are the lyrics so you can listen and read if you want:

I keep a note that I wrote on a taxi receipt
It says, “Don’t listen to anybody other than me”
I hit the big time for a nominal fee
You lose a friend in the end for every dream that you see come true

I got scars upon scrapes, I’ve got bruises on breaks
Masochistically committed to see how much of this I’ll take
Three years under water, and I ain’t even got the shakes
I’m going deeper and deeper and deeper

I’ve got dreams to remember, I’ve got days to forget
I’ve got some phone calls in to God but he ain’t called me back just yet

And now I can say that I wrote a song with John Mayer.